Thursday, December 7

Prologue: The City of Gold

The city was cold and dark. It was a thousand miles below the surface, where there was desert, and rock, and pitiless sun; and nothing else. Or so tradition said.

Far below the city in a chamber gouged out of the living rock sat a woman. She was clad in a shroud, and on her finger was the ring of the dead, the ring that was put on a person’s finger after death, just before the burial.

Though she was insulated from the city by an unspeakable weight of rock, she could see all that happened in every part of it. She was the spirit of the city.

The chamber she was in had no obvious source of light, and yet was diffusely illumined. She was on a slab of rock, the only thing the bare chamber contained. Above that slab was the opening of a long shaft, her one corporeal link with her city and its people. Along one side of the chamber was a sluggishly flowing stream- the blood of the city, it was called. The water was bitter, and dark- and always blood-warm. It was said that the stream would flow for as long as the spirit of the city remained within her chamber. And this water was the lifeblood of the city, and in its dark stream was what made the city prosperous, and her people rich: innumerable granules of gold that the stream brought from somewhere along its course in the rock.

The woman looked young, and her hair was long, and as black as a raven. As black, indeed, as the rock that surrounded her. But her hands were calloused and hard from constant contact with the rock.

There had been a spirit, for as long as the city had existed, imprisoned in that little bubble in the rock- and the city had existed for thousands of years. No one knew who had built the first tunnels, or indeed the last, since none of the tools the people of the city had now could make even a dent in that black rock. No one even knew if the ancestors of the people of the city had themselves hewed it out of the rock, or had found it empty and settled in it.

The city existed as a single tunnel, in a series of five rectangular spirals, one below the other, each turn of the great spiral tunnel connected to the ones above and the one below by shafts, which had rudimentary steps carved into them at intervals. And set along the walls of the tunnel were doors, which led to the chambers in which the people lived.

The end of the tunnel, at the termination of the last and lowest spiral was the Hall of the Dominus, the lord of the city, the master of much of the wealth the city contained. No one was allowed in that last chamber, without express permission, on pain of death. Because that is where the shaft connecting the spirit to the city opened, at the foot of the throne on which the Dominus sat. The walls of the hall were veined with gold, and there were torches all around, and guards who, it was said, never slept.

And so she waited, in her chamber alone, and tired. She watched the people of the city: their crowded marketplaces, the areas where they harvested the gold, the stifling, dangerous tunnels that connected them to other cities, much higher up, closer to the dangerous surface.
And sometimes she sang:
“In the city of gold, will be born the one,
Who will lead the child of man into the sun.”

It was an old couplet, part of the tradition of the city. Men said that it was an old wives tale. But the spirit knew what it meant, and she waited for the Golden One as time grew gnarled in the city of gold.

16 comments:

Anonymous said...

This is the first chapter of a long abandoned novel that I had decided to write during my "fantasy" phase.

Tell me how you like it.

Anonymous said...

your style is rather polished and mature now, compared to what it was when you penned this down....the concept is unique, though! if you can work around the rough edges and give it an unconventional stylistic treatment, this'll be good!!
and of course, FINISH IT.

Anonymous said...

yeah, I wrote this when I was about 16/17. I would like to take it up and finish it, mainly because I would like to read a story set in this environment myself. :)

so thank you very much for your comment, and I really will think about rewriting this, and continuing with the story.

March Hare said...

Tarpor?
Tarpor?
Tarpor?

Mind Mapping said...

i want to go round round the spiral thing.

Anonymous said...

@mormegil: Thanks. And really? what reminds you of it?

@Bim: Etar por kichhu likhle, ami toke definitely janabo!

@merc: :)

Anonymous said...

hmmm. hote pare. Maybe youre even thinking of Moria. Though I swear it isnt plagiarised from there.. really.
:)

Mind Mapping said...

aquilus wasnt there a post after this?

Anonymous said...

um. actually, there was. I put it on, but it sucked so much that I took it off.

damn. I thought no one had noticed.
:)

Rajasee Ray said...

if you are planning not to put the rest of this story up you are evil. evil. evil.

how much had you written? just the prologue or more?
spiral thingy. hmmm. city in levels. i wonder where that started. alternate smileys in the last few comments.

i wish someone would get me all the fantasy stories in the world then i would die reading them. sigh. most of them are so stupid and some (!) are sooo overrated.

but i love.

Anonymous said...

I havent written any more of it..
I had intended at one time to write an epic fantasy novel(!)...

:)

I got the idea in this puzzle I saw a child playing with... you know, where the little ball has to be pushed past a series of obstacles in a spiral tunnelly thing in a plastic box...

and tell me about it. I hate the fact that people have a fixed idea of what constitutes SF&F. Its actually such a varied genre...
One of my pet peeves too!!!

Mind Mapping said...

i noticed i noticed.

i like the spiral game.
and i have always wanted to take the little silver balls out.

Joychaser said...

prolific, aren't we?

Anonymous said...

@merc: me too!!!

@div: We are?
and welcome back! I thought you'd left the blogosphere for good

Joychaser said...

no. i most certainly did not! it was more of an enforced sabbatical what with the pc being on sick leave for a very long time.

Anonymous said...

@ div: ah!

@agarwaen: I believe that is because. for people with imagination, fantasy is the most easiest thing to write!!!